REPRESENTATION OF AGE - GENERAL FEEDBACK

A great effort all round. Clear evidence that advice is being taken onboard from last week's feedback.

Class Av to date: 70%

• Everyone has either equalled or bettered their previous result.
• More people using a short, brief intro to keep themselves focused.
• Overall, students were on task.
• Wider contextual views of a particular group is beginning to creep in - ie is the representation stereotypical? Are society's views met? etc.

Areas for continued focus:

• Editing and sound still not sufficiently discussed in a number of papers - this must remain on the priority list of issues to address.
• Continue to push representation in relation to how society views a particular group of people - ie typical? etc
• Push analysis even more through stronger use of adjectives ie 'the grandmother is presented in a typical fashion here in that she is caring, concerned and genuinely distressed over the fact that Amy has disappeared'.
• Be careful that in the madness of it all, terminology doesn't fall by the way side which happened in a few papers.

Ensure you look at your feedback notes throughout your essay and also at the end - this will help you avoid making the same mistakes twice. Anything you don't understand or agree with, always see me for clarification.

Keep up the great work!

Miss Hunter